thegirlwhofateloves

A few niggly bits..but nothing worth as much as what my finger could place. So I shall settle for good work! (Ignore me - I'm very tired, so i'm not ...

I really rate your ability to make 'darling' and 'sweetheart' work in a poem! lol...seriously, this is fantastic. My only problem would be that you missed the ' out of ...

...I don't know. :) It's not bad, but...something's wrong. Not sure what, but it just doesn't read quite right. Don't know what it is...maybe sounds a little forced in parts. ...

THIS is beautiful. I seriously think so. It's well worded, brilliantly written, without being regimented or stiff. It hits the right notes on every level. *sigh*...and I remember being fourteen... ...

I don't know what this applies to, but I know that you're upset about something :( and I feel bad for you *give TBR a poetically uncliche hug* This is ...

F*** the poem, I love the title! No the poem's great, and what you said about 'humm' makes sense, I think.... Can't do crits, so that is all I have ...

Oh, I love you...this is so brilliant. A true example of rhyming working (take not, The Black Rose...rhyme is definitely not just for old people, thank you very much). My ...

It's...err..fabulous, darling. Absolutely outstanding. The best thing posted on this site since when Nate wrote "Test". Ahh, a defining moment in the history of great prose :wink: Lol. It made ...

Actually, I like this - I know it had no structure, and was more like a story than anything else, but it worked somehow. It kind of just...flowed.... :D I'm ...

One word of advice....I almost didn't read it because of the ever so slightly pretentious title - be careful, if you have no title, name it 'untitled' or something, or ...

I really enjoyed reading this...it's simple enough in the way it's written to be read with flow, but not in an immature way - it has a good mix of ...

Hmmmmmm......well, I liked it, but nowhere near as much as your other stuff I've read. I would love to give you a big critique, but am currently incapable of being ...

This is gorgeous....I really, really liked it. Like yoha I also am totally crap at critiques, but I daresay someone will do a very long critique for you at some ...

:D I liked a way it scarily reminded me of my old Philosophy teacher lol. I love that 'what's hip and what's real...'....made me chuckle, anyway...

I don't think something necessarily has to make sense to be enjoyed. FotN, I think you're being a tad is not bad as such, it's just that it doesn't connect ...