thedelphinater

Wait, I'm a little confuzzled. I thought all of them already knew Nathaniel liked Melody? Or is it just certain people? Anyway, great work as usual. One teeny tiny little ...

Hmm... *ponders* It wasn't a bad poem, it was really good actually. However, I'm pro-choice, so, you know. I mean, I get your point, and I feel bad for the ...

Again, waaaaaaay to short. Combine the chapters or something man!!! Sacrifice the cliffhangers for the flow!!! MY suggestions are combining two and three, or one and two, then three and ...

Not bad. Really short though, rather pointless in a way. I mean, they get in a car crash, she's embarrassed. The end. Um, OK, now what? I would suggest combining ...

Wow. What is up with everyone and such sappy, depressing poetry? Anyway, not bad. There where a little too many commas in the middle, but I'll let Elkiza do most ...

Just one little thing I saw: “You couldn’t pick up the pace?” I snapped in irritation. I was rarely ever in a bad mood, but it was different when things ...

I loved this, mostly because I can sooooo relate! “Mom, no one is going to see my bra, so can we just stick to plain ones?” I have that argument ...

I don't know why you thought this was so poorly written. I'm not sure if it was the best chapter so far, but it was a good way to reveal ...

Awesome job! I don't generally like romance and all that jazz, but I'm actually like this. A few little things though. I think a few were already said, so I ...

Hey guys! Anyway, from what I last read, you changed the end. You just totally scratching the part you showed me, or adding it on later? Anyway, *gasp!* the grammar ...

Yay! First real review! Anyway, pretty good. One thing though, what was with the whole Iris thing? I mean, I know she's a pretty important character, but to me it ...

Feel even more special, because I kept reading!!! I couldn't find anything that wasn't already said. Twas chuckling to myself the entire time, I mean, deep revelations about deep revelations. ...

Feel special Eliza, I've finally read your work. I must say, I really like it. I loved the little dream sequence thing, certainly different from the norm. In most novels, ...

Not a bad concept. I mean, I like a good zombie story as much as the next. Definitely needs some work though. LOTS of run-on sentences. I can't possibly point ...

This. Poem. Was. Awesome!!! I loved, loved, loved it!!! Great imagery and rhythm! A few things though: I think you were going for a rhyme scheme, and for the most ...