tgirly

This review was really, really helpful. I edited the chapter, taking all these critiques into consideration, and would love to hear if you think I fixed up the weak points.

Thanks for the review! I think this poem can have several interpretations. I like your idea about it referring to literature, but I'm not sure other people would pick up ...

Thanks for the comments. I guess what I meant with the breathing vs. eating wasn't that the poem doesn't stay with you, but more of that poems weren't meant to ...

Thanks for all your reviews! Another's opinion is always super helpful.

Thanks; I'll see what I can do to make the poem clearer and expand on it.

I didn't know spark notes had a summary of the allegory; I'll have to check that out. And thanks, fangirl, for the ever-encouraging compliments. :)

This review is crazy helpful. I'm going to do some substantial edits on this poem, takings yours and others' advice, and if you wouldn't mind, I'll send you a link ...

Thanks for you review; I'll see what I can do about the line breaks and stanzas. I would probably say that the contrast for free is 'careful' from the title, ...

Thanks for the comments. :) I'm glad the piece moved you.

Thanks :)

Thank for the feedback!

Thanks for the comments; you truly understood the poem.

And in case I'm not on tomorrow, Happy Anniversary of Your YWS Membership! :)

Thanks for the great feedback!

Yeah; I figured some of the stuff would be revealed later, but I thought I'd mention it just in case. I think you've got a great bit of banter here ...