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Hello! The main critique I’d like to point out is that there are several spaces throughout your novel where you could use more concise wording, by removing filler words or ...

Hello again! Another great chapter. “ “I think you know perfectly well the reason I called you, Russ,” she purred, seductive little kitten that she was ” Again, watch how ...

Again, you have really good characterization and really good description of a character’s facial expressions and thought process and how the character feels about the other characters, but the setti

I love, love, love all the characterization and backstory we’re getting here!!! The relationship between Nyssa and Viggo is adorable, and it makes how callused both are becoming quite heartbreaking.

Nice chapter! Everything's happening so quickly, but I can still picture everything pretty well, and I know how the events are affecting the characters. It’s weird that Russ goes right ...

Hello again, This half of the chapter is pretty great. The only major thing is that I don't know much about maximum security prisons, so I would suggest researching them, ...

Hello, This is a great beginning to a novel. The plot is really firmly established, the characters are pretty well-explained, the major conflicts and the antagonist are all in place, ...

Hello again! "What Brett wasn’t sure of was how far he had to climb to be safe, or what, of course, happened if the shadows caught up to him." This ...

Hello and happy Review Day! I thought you did a really good job in this chapter of giving the reader a clear vision of Brett's surroundings as well as what ...

Hello Tammy, I loved this article and found it pretty inspiring. My favorite part was when you said "Girls should grow as independent as birds." I thought that was really ...

I like this piece a lot! You've got some great word choice and imagery. My one critique would be that I don't think it's necessary to repeat 'sharpie' so often. ...

Hi, Jurelixranoanad, it’s tgirly again! I like the way you begin the chapter, but I feel like “afar off” doesn’t really match up with the more casual tone you established ...

Hello and happy Review Day! I’m tgirly, here to review your chapters. I like the “___ days before” headings. I think they’re intriguing and leave the reader wondering what monumental ...

Hi! This is tgirly, here to review your piece. I like this chapter a lot; I think it does a really good job of setting up the story’s conflict and ...

This piece was so beautiful and so sad. I loved it. You captured the feeling of returning to a familiar place and finding it a bit foreign. I understand that ...