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I agree with lockedlibrary, you have to write more! I have to know what happens next, and more about him/her! I think it could be a little clearer, since I ...

Three miles a day? Uggh. I think if you broke it into smaller lines, it would have better flow. I agree with paperback that at first it seems so serious, ...

Hey, pretty good start for a poem and I like the theme. It reminds me a little bit of the song Fireflies (love that song). So on to the review; ...

My favorite line is the last line: "Where I’m too safe and sound." I like that a lot. I don't think there should be a comment between "Sprinting" and "freely. ...

I like this piece a lot. Even though it's so short, it's unique and I love the imagery and metaphor. I think that Shipwrecked Love might be too long a ...

*Gasp!* No! This is a really good story because, even though it''s so short, you really capture what's going on and draw in the readers and get them to know ...

I like the last line. I think you should break it up into stanzas, to make it more readable. Some of it was confusing, but most of it was good. ...

I didn't really understand some of it at the end but that's probablly because this is the first I've read of this story found a few mistakes; 'taking my feet ...

Wow interesting story. This really reminds me of a book I read called; North of Beautiful, by Justina Chen Headley. It's also about a girl with a birthmark on her ...

The very first time you say "Breath" I think you mean Breathe, and I think that would work better. Also "minuscule strides" is an oximoron I believe, so there's not ...

I agree with the person who said "It's bumming me out but it's Beautiful!" I can really feel the emotion in it, and I can completely relate to all that ...

I think this poem needs some work.. in some parts I'm getting what you're saying but in others I'm completely lost to be honest. The poem is very "in your ...

The first sentence is kind of does not make sense, it seems contradictory. Her thoughts seem a little bit short and choppy. I like how the stranger talks it gives ...

It's really a dark poem, a little too dark for me. The title I don't really understand, and it seems long for such a short poem. There should not be ...

Interesting story! Very original deffinantly. I really liked the character of the green-skinned serpant, I could picture her and kind of hear her. I would change the sentence that said ...