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This is unrelated, but I really love your avatar! Good Omens is such a good show!! “So let me get this straight. You are a Fladian. You were abducted by ...

“I heard you two talking with the strange lady yesterday. Are there bad guys out there?” “For now, there won’t be after Cecilia beats them up,” said Ren. This is ...

In the first paragraph, you do a super awesome job of making that jump in time feel really natural, and filling us in on what's happened in the intervening years ...

Hi Rohan, and happy Review Day! This piece is brilliantly constructed. I love the precise word choice and the lyrical imagery that keeps you reading, even when you're not sure ...

Hi Katnes and Happy Review Day! First, I want to say that I love the repetition of "a million times" always followed by "a trillion more". I think the use ...

Hello Ejay! Can't wait to review this piece; it was a great read! First, the structure, especially at the beginning, reminded me a lot of Isaac Asimov's essay "What is ...

Hi Fantasywriter! This is a great first chapter because it gets right to the action and sets up what I presume is going to be one of the big conflicts ...

Hi Bellarke!! I think this poem is about moving past a painful situation onto something better. Like the title suggests, it's about how we deal with "hurt" and how when ...

I love how you begin with her waking up like you did with the first chapter. I think it reflects how repetitious her own pain is becoming; I feel like ...

Hello, LadyBird!!! Once again, a wonderful chapter! You're starting to get the reader more peaks into the past events, which is thickening the plot nicely, and keeping the reader engaged. ...

Hi Ladybird! Excited to see this chapter posted! I love the married couple with the cats and the smuggled gem; everything going on there is such gold! It's the type ...

I love the first line of this poem a lot, how it starts with the winds blowing slow, and the rhyme kind of lulls the reader, but then everything turns ...

I love how you were able to change the font and text size! I didn't even know you could do that on YWS! Awesome! I enjoy your rhyme scheme. I ...

This piece is so honest, and I love how you come from a place of personal experience, which keeps it from tilting preachy, because you're just talking about what you've ...

And for one more time this fine Review Day, Hello Ladybird! : ) I'm appreciating this flashback to the past! Good timing, because I needed some history. I wonder, though, ...