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Wow, I really like this, especially since you wrote it when you were so young. I like how the rhyming scheme is random, it adds to the mood of the ...

I really like this poem! It's great for a first one. All I have to say is that you should include more punctuation, especially periods so it's a little easier ...

I really like this poem, especially the repetition of the word, "jump". I also love the metaphors in this poem. It's really good! Happy writing!

Thank you so much, guys! I really appreciate the critiquing and feedback. You just raised my mood one-hundred percent! :D :D :D :D :D Okay, now it's time for me ...

Umm... too short to be critiqued. It reminds me of a song my brother sang to me once. Haha. Never mind. Are you sure this isn't from a song? And ...

Thanks, Prokaryote. Good critique. The thing is that I already wrote five chapters of this story. And also, this story is going to start being different after a few chapters ...

All about an apple. And actually interesting. I liked it. It was short and funny. I can imagine Sirius like this. :) ~Jamie

Wow, great poem! Once change, probably a typo. "Adolescence." Like the poem, though! I like the second to last stanza a lot. ~Jamie

The only correction I would make would be to give and take some of the punctuation there so the poem flows more smoothly. Other than that, great job! The poem ...

Punctuation would definitely make it flow better. Nice poem, by the way. I like the rhyming with run and sun at the end. Very neat. :) ~Jamie

I agree with all of Bella's changes that she made. It really does sound interesting, though. I would want to read more if the mistakes were fixed. I hope the ...

I love it! Such an awesome work! Keep writing. :)