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I loved this story! It had me completely engaged! You have quite the imagination and this story was amazing well thought out and written. I'm also surprised no one has ...

I thought it was funny and a great idea but it didn't seem much like a poem. You need to make it flow a bit more and add some stanzas. ...

Beautiful poem. There's so much imagery in it and I could really feel her motion and see what was happening. I didn't really like the style. You didn't seem to ...

I think this is very interesting but I must say it doesn't seem very "poetic" to me. It just seemed like you rambling about where you were at. Perhaps you ...

This is such a sad story. I'm not sure how to review this. It's always hard for me to read stories about abuse. At first I was thinking you might ...

Hello. I'm finally here to review. So I think I disagree with the other two reviews. This does sound like a poem but I think you need to make it ...

I'm finally here to review:) I' ve been busy all week and then a couple days ago I figured I would wait until review day. This story is so creative! ...

Great use of detail! And I loved your writing style. I just wanted to say lighten up a little and calm down. I'm sure whatever story this is was great. ...

What time period is this in? I am sixteen, and I am to marry Aydan Everny tomorrow. I was taken back by that line and wondered if this was supposed ...

This was such a cute story. I always laughed at upperclassmen dating freshman and I said a high school sweetheart marrige would never last (and I'm not denying that) but ...

Well I'm sad you're not going to finish it, but I don't think you can delete it because it has comments attached. You can, however, edit it and change it ...

Red: Grammar/spelling mistakes Blue: My comments Green: It would sound better like... SLURP! Bob sucked on his lollipop once again. He giggled at the noise that he made and did ...

Beautiful poem. I don't use puntuation in my poetry either so I know where you're coming from. Poetry is a form of art and it doesn't have the same rules ...

I don't think I've ever seen an ABC poem on here. And I didn't know you could write one with just A-D. I loved it! Simple and sweet with so ...

Hello random person in whom I have never met before;) Welcome to Young Writer's Society. Any questions can be answered by me. Look at my profile. You may just find ...