speakerskat

WOW! Can I use that part you wrote and change it a little, I wish my whole book will be that good nice. Ya little nitpicks fun... mostly typos I ...

hey June, I wrote a revision to this in which I changed hallow to hollow , I apologize for that. And thanks for the review

Yes thanks for the review, this was really more of a jokey rap and certainly not my best poem. I'm always up for some constructive critisisim though ;)

You are almost spot on with the idea behind this poem ;)

ya it's real fire and ya there is a personal story behind it it could also be taken metephorically :P

Well truth is most love end bitter so XD I wrote how I felt :P thans though

Hmm, I do undertand what you mean, that will be interesting. Ye, I just like rhyme so much I let it dictate my writing quite often . I am trying ...

It was supposed to break the natural rhyme scheme, sort of like a song and thanks!

Aww wow everyone thanks really!

Aww, thanks neon. Ya this was one of those poems I really poured over

Aww, thanks neon. Ya this was one of those poems I really poured over

That is really not necessary, it's an out dated style. I used to say the same XD Up to the writer how they wanna do it really...

Aw thanks, it took a lot of editing and a little help from my flute for the tune but it was worth it XD Thanks to everyone else as well, ...

That was me...I was there

Hmm it seems I struggel with finding the balence between to much and to little words, oroginally this was just a paragraph with a lot of description but I cut ...