speakerskat

thanks

I understand it was rather choppy but that was my intention. I doubt if you had someone die you'd write a perfectly fluent poem. Also "our deaths do us part" ...

I have a thing about loving commas its a habit. Thanks I just wrote this on the fly and put almost no effort into it. I plan to write a ...

oh okay makes sense now

thanks, the repetition was intended and I wanted it to be very short but I tried hard to have almost the same syllables in every line

thanks I worked VERY hard to make sure this poem had a good rhyme scheme and flowed smoothly

indeed

actually it also shows how love cant be confined to any definite principle as well

combine your comments itll be a review

still to short

you realize, you didn't mark this as a review so it didn't count

Hey I know this is an old poem but by the last ine did you mean she dies? Post on my wall please

Yeah, wrote this for my love interest and they didn't like it very much... darn I just wanna write a really good romantic poem except the only ones I seem ...

Yes I sis and I think it fits

I mean like the lines should either be all separated or all able to stand alone .but that's just my opinion