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Great~Fantastic~loving~brilliant~ I love it!Great for Mothers day! Well the rythme is a little off and the tempo isn't kept.The 3rd stanza is awkward and throws off the beat.The poem lacks ...

Well... First of all I would like to say that I have been there and I am sorry.I hope you see that we understand and alot of people have gonethrough ...

So... Well lets start with what I liked.I liked the rhyming and the tempo was fairly smooth.The concept was built and I like the mystery.Its like I don't know wether ...

I liked the poem had a depth that shows how questions go really portrayed the emotions of rejection and how we wonder why.I think the "is it because you didnt ...

Matt, That is a amazing and heart renching poem.I love how you used un rhyming rhymes and drew them together.The emotion was so bold and shadowy.The adjectives are well used ...

I literally can not review this seriously but it is a truly magnifiscent peice.You should turn it into a short story. My favorite parts were: she went at it like ...

First of All, I have to say how much I relate to this and you portrayed the emotions so strongly, its amazing. The way you put the emotions into the ...

I am not gonna edit because I understand when you have a fight with a friend and write a poem without thinking about grammar or happened to me and I ...

The poem is beautiful and something we can all relate to.Its lovely and sorrowful. I think you should a ending.Not like a happy ending but something like hes given up ...

It was good and reminded me of love.I am geussing someone had a goodday? I think you should add maybe something like "and its days like this that make me ...

When I was reading I had the sense it was my life and a stranger was taking my was chilling and dramatic.I felt as though her sister wanted lies and ...

Hello Whisperer! So...first things first,I would like to say good job at the repetitive rhyming!It is hard to keep a rhythmic rhyming tempo in poems.The base of the story is ...

I liked it because it showed how behind every smile is a lie or a sorrowful painted a picture in my head and i loved the visual coherence you had.I ...