spartacus

I will not critique this because its just beautifully great the way it is.The repetition of "I" is really good and this poem is really wonderfully written.Great job and hold ...

This really touched because I'm going through the same thing. I wrote a poem about it called Coward,(its about my dad). I hope things get better.things get better or atleast ...

That was great :). I agree with everyone that was a good poem that took some time to figure but in a good way. Great job. I haven't seen a ...

Wow! This is good! At first,I was worried about the orientation but it pulled together. The visual coherence is vividly drawn.Bravo! There was really good formatting there but at first,the ...

I really liked this poem,it was great! The tempo is pretty good but the last stanza throws it off and makes it vulnerable. The "don't cry child" has more potential,although ...

this isn't bad like you said just not up to its full potential. It isn't structured very well and could use some work but has great visual coherence. It insuates ...

Your angelic, soft hair, and your shimmering brown eyes. Your sweet voice, flowing in the air, was what made me realize; There's more to tears than sadness, thats really visual ...

This is truly a vivid poem. The visual coherence is extraordinary and the description has me amazed. I was truly amazed as I practically saw everything in my mind. Great ...

So... The flow of the poem was really good. The tempo was bad in the first stanza but shot off nice after that. The rythme was good sides the first ...

The curse words are totally throwing the poem off and repetitive. The tempo is uncertain and the rythme is uneven. I like the basis of the poem but the build ...

This is a truly riveting poem and jubilant peice.The coherence and comprehensive writing is intense.The only thing I don't like is the last line and the tempo and rythme is ...

This a fantastic poem and wonderfully has rythme but a uneven tempo.The originality is great and so un-cliche.There is such a riveting style and pathetic emotion to the words.Its great ...

Wow,I really love this explains the unreturned love,empty soul,missing person in a one sided was amazing,truly.I think your tempo is off slightly but the rythme is fairly even.There is such ...

Hehe... This is original and funny.Its different and riveting.Intensely written although not serious!Magnifiscent and hilarious! Great job! ~spartacus~ the serious person I am is on a coffee break as

The poem is slightly cliche but you have your origanality in there with your word choice.Truly wonderful rythme.The rhyming and tempo could not be more intense.Fantastic! WOW great job! Keep ...