Published March 5, 2011
Do I love?
I do not know.
He kisses me,
I cannot show
an eagerness
to him who loves,
I kiss him back
‘tis not enough.
No sweetness in
that little kiss,
I shudder at
my marble lips.
I wonder why
I cannot show
a fevered heart,
I do not know.
I wish I could
hand him my heart,
but how could I
without that spark?
Do I love?
I think I know,
I fear I have
no love to show.
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Wow. Very nice poem. the wording, everything is wonderful.
Do I love..? I think the dots make it more obvious that it is a question posed towards yourself.
I do not know.
He kisses me,
I cannot show
an eagerness
to him who loves,
I kiss him back
‘tis not enough. LOVE
No sweetness in
that little kiss,
I shudder at
my marble lips.nice imagery/
I wonder why
I cannot show
a fevered heart,
I do not know. nicce, I love the italics
I wish I could
hand him my heart,
but how could I
without that spark? Heres where the lines get a little clunky. I'm not sure how to rewrite that, though. It works, it's just not perfect.
Do I love?
I think I know,
I fear I have
no love to show. perfect ending.