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Hmmm...that was an interesting chapter. It's kind of sad to me to see people getting engaged or having sex with people or whatever when they're not absolutely sure that's what ...

Oh good lord, what an excellent continuation of the story! I love your characters so much - how Caiden is so nice and gentlemanly and seems to like Hope, but ...

Squeeeee! Excellent chapter, I loved it! One tiny typo thingy: He was to close now, and his hand was outstretched to touch the rock embedded in my furry chest. to ...

*gasp* down the mountain? *nibbles fingernails nervously* I'm going to run and read chapter six immediately. I do have a suggestion, because that was such a short chapter - couldn't ...

“How do you do it?” I asked the boy, eagerness now filling my voice and soul. I’d always been a quick learner, and I hated being second best in anything. ...

Yay! I don't have time for a full-blown crit, but I absolutely loved the Twilight series (am jumping up and down for Breaking Dawn to come out) and I absolutely ...

Here I am, as promised! I knew I'd already ready the first few chapters! But I haven't done four and five, yet. I was going to say that I haven't ...

Ha HA! You see, my method of waiting until everybody else has already done awesome critiques works! Now I can be my normal lazy self and just point out a ...

hey there! I have one thing to add to Snoinks excellent comments: The scene where he gets beat up could be slightly less 'telling,' a little more 'showing.' Instead of ...

While I do agree with what the previous critiquer said, I must say I really enjoyed this piece. I would like a little more clarity on where exactly Khor is ...

I really liked this...don't really have time to write a real critique but I just wanted to ask if the whole quotes precisely from Pride and Prejudice was on purpose? ...

I agree...don't post character summaries! In a well-written book we should be able to tell one character from another by the writing itself. It's kind of like posting a picture ...

I see the other critiquers have already beaten me to all of the stuff I was going to point out as far as nitpicks so, so I'll just compare it ...

*gasp* I absolutely adore this piece!!! Your characters are unique and your writing style is engaging and interesting. I love the fact that your main characters so far (Gaven) have ...

Hi, there! First of all I'd like to say that this piece had a really sweet, sad and simple feel to it with beautiful imagery. A perfect bit for a ...