snoopysoap

yeah this was alright but i would have to say, it didn't really give much imagery. even if it isn't one of your best it was an alright read. ok ...

this was a really good read! there aren't too many mistakes or misaps that i could find, and the ones that i did have been noted and suggestions have been ...

this is really good. can i just say the only thing i can? ....EPIC... there are a few things here and there that could be improved on and i think ...

hey this was cool, i liked it! as was said by Lava, it is a bit info dumpy and you could use better descriptive words (although it is really good ...

hey this is really good although it is a bit short, but some people enjoy short prologues! i really want to find out more! this is actually really interesting i ...

hey me again! this is actually very good, it has potential, keep writting! just watch your grammar and punctuation, you have a couple of typos there but i'm not sure ...

hey i really enjoyed this... the funny thing is that this is actually true, because that is what human kind does. i couldn't find much to complain about XD just ...

hey...this was really good! keep writting! i couldn't find anything that needed changing. it was awesome! if you need a review just pm me... i liked this heaps! Soap :thud:

i dont know about other readers but i found this hard to get into. it needs something to get the reader interested. a hook. another thing. with your dialogue... how ...

hmmm. not sure what this is ment to be, though i must say it is...different. explain more about what it is i guess. needs more imagery (that is if you're ...

this was nice. i liked it. you could probably put some paragraphs or something in there, instead of it being just one big block (though im not one to talk...working ...

i'm not sure if anyone has mentioned this seems like your forcing the rhyming thing a bit, it stops and starts. the flow is disrupted i guess. it's a nice ...

this is a very....diferent piece, it's sort of like poetry.... O.o i found it sort of detached, i got lost too...what happened to make her get in the place she ...

hey, loved this...i woud defineatly read on... its vey spontanious...entertaing. you had a few typos there to... you said landscaped instead of landscape :p keep writing, i loved it. who ...

very odd... i like it though, its a different way to write poems...keep it up. i like the bit with the building blocks, very smart... i like the last verse ...