snickerdooly

Hi. I really liked this. I've never read anything like this before so it definitly sparked my interest. I liked how you had your puncuation. But I don't want to ...

I'm studying World war 11 right now and Italy was in the war. There were several other wars that began because of Germany innvading PolaND. But other than that I ...

Wow I liked it a lot even though it was a bit brutal. I'm not complaining. I read it twice trying to look for errors but either I am very ...

I thought this was really great and something very diffrent.But a suggestion, try to make the first section a bit more interesting. Something that you can get drawn into. I ...

I liked this story. But you could work on developing your characters a bit more, with Jay especially it showed how he was distant but you need to be more ...

This poem had good description but sounds very choppy and sort of falls We met one night, in the dark, the fear, We exchanged smiles, I held my glass up ...

HI Can you please PM me and tell me whats happening because I think I get the idea so this girl goes to live with these people that are really ...

I Loved it! but it seems sort of like a rant and that's what it is but you should make it have more rest. I read it out loud and ...

I really liked it! if you read the first chapter it makes total sense and when i read stories I just read whats in them and how the words are ...

I love this poem all the rhyming words actually go with this poem! Great job! But there are a few misspelled words and punctuation errors but I bet if you ...

OH MY GOD!!! that was awesome!! you need to write more and PM when you do because that was amazing! I wouldn't fix anything it was awesome.. wait you could ...

Good job! I really liked it but you could work on the rhythm a bit. On the last part of the poem you could do: "She was suffocating, drowning it ...

Okay I love it, and by the way your really good at making your characters speak with dialogue and all that. Something you need to work on a bit though ...

I love it, it's a great beginning. This is my very first review so bear with me, I like how it's written but it could use a lot more description ...

I've read all the chapters and I need more, my life depends on it. Any second now my heart may stop beating inside my chest and I'll fall to the ...