smorgishborg

Attention must be paid! Let me first explain how I looked at this. You're imagery is inspired and unparalleled on this site, as usual. What I consistently find myself grasping ...

Words, words, words. Are we all not yet the horrid ones with fits of neurosis and melodrama? Perhaps buried deep, unleashed once we've settled into the poem, I might be ...

Too vague, but very fixable, and thankfully not overdone. Don’t stop, never stop, keep up with the stars follow the moons orbit, run ‘till the sunlight fades behind you. A ...

If only it was as simple as getting the punctuation right. The dance has begun, this Unholy Masquerade A melody so haunting A rhythm so sweet. So much for a ...

I could talk about how the writing is beautiful, but I think you know this already. Instead I'll ask a question; So, what's the point ? There's not much use ...

Didn't do anything for me. See, Poems need to come to a point. There's got to be something I can take away from the poem. An understanding. Sadly, I just ...

Hey Kylan, this poem is a work of art! A/N: For Hannah's Contest. Painting by Pierre Auguste Renoir she would only bring her hair down in the morning, when it ...

I feel like this could be something more. Eight years gone by. Eight years he's been gone. Eight Christmases. Eight New Years. I don't like the choice of New Years ...

Takes too long to say too little. I try to pretend, I try to stay away, But the more that I try, The more I make mistakes. You are the ...

Hey, fellow Minnesotan! First, the font and colors distract from the words. Second, I'd be curious to know your background with regards to all of this. Pardon me for generalizing, ...

It's a misfire. You quite clearly are a good writer, but this just doesn't measure up in any way really. It feels lazy and undeveloped, there's nothing for the reader ...

I thought this was a Black Eyed Peas song... BOOM-boom BOOM-boom Your heartbeat BOOM-boom BOOM-boom Is constant Credit for being original, I thought about this and a bit, and I ...

Cute and original! I was once a gigantic piece of the steep cliff block an independent, blithe rock I would suggest a less passive way to start this poem, but ...

Alright, got it, the @ symbol looks like all of these things. But what's the greater significance? I could find clouds all day that look like any one of these ...

Very nice! At first, I likened it to a Vampire Weekend song. But towards the end, it had a very sweet Calvin and Hobbes feel. Driving through the trafficked streets, ...