smorgishborg

Curious. Thats really my end reaction. I have mixed feelings about this. Lets start with what I know: + The bold was distracting and annoying. So were the spaces. Please ...

Very good, very well practiced. This has no elementary problems, but I'm sure you know this... I defer to your theater class. Let me tell you what I was uneasy ...

Again, the context problem. is this interesting in any way? No. I'm trying to redeem the last minute of my life by writing this critique. YOU NEED A PLOT ARC ...

It kinda bugs me to be critiquing a couple lines of dialogue, because there is no perspective. You won't get any decent advice from anything anybody says on here, because ...

No, it's not a poem about cigarettes. Your common misconception is one of whom is unfamiliar with literary terms and objectives. Touche! It seems to me that this poem tries ...

This is in the same vein as your later piece (which I reviewed first), Blue Manhattan. That is; a romantic portrayal of good ol' NYC. I enjoyed this one more ...

Lets be honest with ourselves, it ain't that great. Before this becomes a feature length play, (and it's waaaay to short to be a scene or an act or anything; ...

The poem is nice, but I think you may have bitten off more then you can chew. I mean NY is such a fantastic topic, so many things to describe! ...

It's very nice, I'm excited to hear it! Only fault I can really find, is that there isn't a line the repeats enough to hold it together. Without a doubt, ...

It was nice, definately ended better then it started, but overall there weren't any fatal errors. A couple things if you will: + I hate the name "Sparkston". Unless it ...

You expressed a very generic sentiment in a very generic way. I didn't care for it. Approaching a very broad topic like this one, is something that should be done ...

All well and good I guess. This really isn't my favorite type of story, I'm not too into the whole ancient legends/magic/jewel thing. You had a lot to cover, but ...

Very interesting premise... Interesting indeed. I agree with Cade's comments on the dialouge. I'll add that I didn't like how certain characters acted to extraordinary events. e.g. + Alison doesn't ...

I just deleted my entire crit. Oh well, I'm not that easily discouraged! This has too many mistakes for a basic description, so I've done a line by line in ...

I'm not laughing Kit! I liked it quite a bit. But since nobody here seems interesting in giving this the review it deserves, I felt I'd have to try. Make ...