smashles

This was a pretty good poem. Something that really bugged me about it, though, was that the first verse rhymed and the second one didn't. You need to make it ...

Okay to start with, I'll just say: keep the capitalisation. Some poems do have little letters at the start of lines, but that should only be done if the person ...

Oooh! I do like this poem! It had my attention from beggining to end which is exactly what a poem should do. The repitition was very... intriguing. There was absolutely ...

Hey, it's smashles here for a review! I'd like to start off by saying I really like this piece. It's creative and I really like the way you've patterned your ...

I like this poem/song. I love the way you describe all of this persons' features because it just seems like something people actually think to themselves about people they love. ...

This is a cute poem. I think that even though it doesn't have a lot of description it still tells us a story. She is obviously in love with this ...

OMG! These are such beautiful lyrics! It makes me sad to just think about this message! I'm sure with a perfect tune, this song could be absolutely amazing. The best ...

Hey there inkwell! It's a pretty good poem you've got going there, though it was a tad confusing... I like the wording you used and I'm guessing it's a little ...

Hey emalily! Okay so basically this is a pretty basic storyline... The conversation thye had was a bit... too random. Try making it flow a bit better. Loved the first ...

Hey hey, it's smashles here to review! Okay so first up it's got a very good storyline to it. He sounds like a very lonely man. Secondly, you need to ...

Hey there, matio! Just a few things! 1. No biggie, but you put 'of' instead of 'off'. 2. The amount of syllables in each line is a bit varied. Make ...

I like it. It's different. A quick poem about suicide written perfectly... and sort of in a happy way. Well, not really happy but it doesn't make you sad. Just ...

It does sound depressing and as I read it I kind of think it actually was. This was a really easy poem to read, rhyming and as far as I ...

I wish I could go back to the days. Those were the days when homework was to say what you did on the weekend, or draw a picture of your ...

More, more, more! That's a really cool start to a story. You've really drawn me in and I'd love to see more. The only problem I found with it was ...