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Thank you very much :)

It's great :) It's short, but effective. It's broken, just like the mind you are trying to portray, and settles with me well, as I also have a "broken mind" ...

Here are the stanzas :)

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This was good. You could have done some more work with the stanzas to make them flow more and give it a better rhythm. I found one or two spelling ...

This was a really short but meaningful poem. It curves to the many different ways of murder, and just reaches out and grabs the viewer and says 'look, if you ...

When all you want is for it to end When all you wish for is a single friend When you cry in your room feeling all alone When you just ...

Yea pretty much :( Thanks for the comment :) It is supposed to be repeated and stuff with the whole 'when you' thing as that was the style i decided ...

thanks for the review :) this was a really rushed story and i wasn't really paying attention to anything the whole time i wrote it. it was pretty much just ...

your right it was rushed XD this wasn't really something i spent a lot of thought on more as something i did in my spare time XD thanks for the ...

Thanks so much for the review :) was the first story ive ever finished so yea sorry thats its not perfect. I will try to make the grammer and stuff ...