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In the second paragraph, the first line says "...a little anti- sometimes?" Maybe you should change that to something else. The intent of that sentence isn't very clear and it ...

This is just amazing. Only a couple things I want to give my opinion on. First, maybe you should add periods just to signif something new starting like after "curved ...

I think you should end the sentence at "then your right" Curl, not curled. You switched tenses. Maybe add a space between the lines "when they do you can feel..." ...

Ok so for the first sentence, I think you should change it to ""have always been my enemies". I loved the sentence that said "I think they secretly hope for ...

I like the idea of making this like a conversation only, so I'm assuming this is over text? I wish you would i like the little texting conversation in the ...

I like the idea of the times. It's kind of rare to find pieces like this. "Page twenty four of thirty" I think you can remove this "Spring break. Last ...

I read your other part that was similar to this one and again, this is absolutely exceptional. I do believe jay the small changes somehow make it even better, even ...

This is, by far, no doubt, the most beautiful piece of writing about love I have ever read. It is so... pure. It's so true and just pure. It's amazing ...

"It starts a nameless drop in the wind." I think you should change this to say "it starts with a nameless drop in the wind." "Slowly and gently" "Somewhere its ...

I think the overall arching concept of the story is really great. The fact that this is based off of a true story is actually pretty terrifying, and I'm going ...

"stands thin woman, long hair tied..." I think you should separate it so the sentence isn't as long and make it "stands a thin woman. Her long hair is tied ...

I wanted to make a small comment about the small blurb displayed, I thought it was very vague and it really caught my attention. "Looking at each other... I know ...

"It's textbook sensible. Clear. The forbearer of facts. But..." I think you should replace the periods with commas. It is grammatically better to do so because the single words do ...

Holy. Deer. Goodness. Gracious. That was completely terrifying yet amazing. The ending... that cliffhanger... I can't. I simply cannot. The only thing I will fix in this are a couple ...

First 8 just want to say great story. Absolutely great. As the story progressed, my caring got harder. Seriously, this was beautiful. I love how it's so filled with truth ...