singdawg

you need to work on your rhyming by avoiding words like "you" or "thing", lie and inside do not rhyme. I think "family that I can blame" works better. "I ...

You need to work on grammar, contstruction of your train of thought (pun intended) and your intended meaning.

sorry man, you gotta make it more interesting

The simplicity of this is ruined by it not having more flow. I felt that some combinations of words do not go together as well as they should, and if ...

I like this, I think a little longer length might have worked better to convey true anger, use more imagery.

Some of your adjectives like "black" "cold" ect need to be reworked, as do your choice for end rhymes which overuses patterns like.. bliss/kiss to/you ect ect

ending with a previously well used aphorism/maxim like "be the change you wish to see/be" just shows a lack of creativity, sorry.

Harry Potter will probably become a very famous classic novel, however it cannot be classified as classic now, since it is less than 20 years old.

why do you want to listen to music that reminds you of how shit life can be? listen to something positive.

holy editing is needed this is not romance if this is about your life, go get some help

I liked it, although I thought in some places your flow was destroyed

what am I running from?

Fuck man.. I just spent like an hour typing out stuff, and then hit the damn back button. anyways, Thanks for the replies, this is my weakest story for sure, ...