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Wow Sureal, thats a good point. I saw it on the latest post thing on the left of the homepage and I didn't even look at the date, xD. -Joel-

XD, ok RJ. It was for a school project so don't expect anything great or even good for that matter. -Joel-

I'm definitly not a poet, but I can enjoy these. It's like looking at an abstract painting, kind of what Crysi said. It's so cool to read them all. Great ...

Wow, four more??? I wish I could write with a constisincy of everyone else on this site. I'm a little caught up with the debate group, which still brings points ...

Okay, I haven't read this in a while. Thanks a lot for the critigues everyone. As I said I made this for an English report the night before it was ...

Wow Dan, this was really good. Good job! -Joel-

I think it really painted a picture, and I agree with everyone that you have good imagry, but it seemed a bit silly. I'm not sure if it was sup[posed ...

LOL! This was hilarious Jab! I was just looking through your portfolio for something to crit and I found this! It's hilarious! Great job. -Joel-

I enjoyed this. Good job, Jab pretty much covered all the errors. Good job, and keep it up. -Joel-

Wow Jab, this is deep and very emotional. Good job.

I enjoyed reading this, but at times I was a little confused at who was talking or narrating. Other then that, it had a solid story except for the dedication. ...

I thought it was good except for the phrase Like stumbling across some tombs I'm not really sure what that means, but the enitre poem is kind of creppy.

This was really good and I enjoyed reading it. I couldn't really find anything wrong with it besides a few commas that shouldn't have been there. I look forward to ...

Wow, this is really good. I agree though, I wish I could hear it!

Wow, this is really deep. You did a great job with spelling and grammer, as well as creative languege that really brought the story alive. I enjoyed reading it, and ...