shiney1

Very good start! I like to real stories with this kind of style, and first person mostly. Just a few things: "Kate!" my best friend, Alexis called to me in ...

This is really good! I can hear Meghan speaking, no monotone. I like stories and books like these because they give me a different point of view of another girl. ...

This is a good start. I love the imagery and diction. This poem depresses me, with its Gothic theme, which is getting quite common and tiresome, with Twilight and all. ...

Very good! So much descriptiveness and imagery, which keeps your audience focused. You just need a few things, pauses, capitalization, and periods mostly. You lied to my face ; Looked ...

I like this poem. It has a lot of emotion and is easy to understand, and is not to "boo-hoo I love you don't leave me!" mushy stuff that I ...

I like the subject of light and dark without the Gothic-theme, which is used tiresomely these days, so thumbs up for that. As stated above, maybe a little, tiny bit ...

It's a pretty good poem. It's flow is good, but I got kind of confused because I could not really find a main thing to focus on. Head bent, winding ...

Pretty cool poem, the shortest I have seen. It is a really good first entry too! When I read it again, I imagine the poem itself echoing in my head. ...

Pretty neat. At first I liked the repetition, but in the middle it got kind of annoying, but at the end it fit in pretty well. I think that these ...

Well, very good poem! It has a lot of mixed feelings, and is on the verge of those Gothic-Twilight types, but not totally there, which I like(those things are getting ...

This is neat. It really does express what it is like for some people before they begin writing, or even drawing for that matter (like me). Inky words that spout ...

Okay... It is a good try, but I get so confused by the lack of punctuation. Well, let me try and help by putting what I think is missing... I ...

It's a good first poem! Has good feeling in ti, and only a few corrections: Once upon a time , I could count on you . You could hold my ...

Was there good rhythm? Did the rhythm enhance the feel of the poem? Oh my yes. This is one of the best if not the best poem I have read ...

I chuckled after reading this. You've got kind of the dame style of writing poetry as my sister. You are blunt, get right to the point, and have a good ...