shanan-cat

Hey Vivi! The story... was... amazing! I loved all the adjectives that you used, but there where a few typos? clogging me senses I think that it's my senses, right? ...

HI! It was interesting, but kind of weird at the same time. I think it would have been better if you had rhymed each line with the other, It might ...

I'm sorry, friend, but I can't critique this 'cause it's way tooooo long and it would take forever to do a good review. I agree with BBB and BF, shorten ...

Just so you know, there's supposed to be space between each dialogue. There should be a "... this person said" after each piece of dialogue, so we don't get mixed ...

You're only eleven! How are you on this site? Your not allowed unless your thirteen or older you know? Anyways, back to the review... I liked your poem, it has ...

I had afew problems with your poem: [quote]but something inside of me won't. This line doesn't make sense. Maybe something like: But something inside won't let me part, for i ...

Thought that it was interesting, but kind of lost me at the end... Who killed who and why such the sudden entry into the story? You didn't really give us ...

I liked it! It's better than anything that I could do! Liked the second the best, then the third, then finally the first. Your good my ols friend! shanan-cat! :smt026 ...

Hi again! I liked your poem, it really touched me with nice words. The only thing that I didn't like was the fact that you had a weird ending. It ...

No offence buddy, but his is not a poem. It's not relvant to anything, and there's no real emotion to it. I think that you should have actually editedit and ...

I didn't really like it because it didn't really have much point to it... I'm really sorry. The end wasn't very good, no offence, and the fact that all you're ...

I liked your poem, but I thought that it was a bit tooo short. It didn't really have a good ending, nice rhyming though! If you made it longer you ...

Like Snoink said, Grammar is important, make sure you review it before you post it, k? I liked the idea, but you had a lot of big paragraphs wich could ...

Hey Jared, I liked your story, but I had a few problems: [quote] They’re always talking and never listen In this sentence, "listen" should be "listening". You also don't tell ...

Um... see, I didn't really like it because it didn't make me feel what you're feeling. You also didn't put capital "I's" anywhere in you poem. You must remember that, ...