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Re: What do you think? Chapter 1 (rewrite)
Hello, Skittles. The pier view below my apartment window was brilliant. The small cramped room with a musty bed and an unbalanced desk was everything a writer could ask for. ...
Sep 24, 2009 -
Re: The Dream Snatcher
You have the usual problems that every writer suffers: grammer!!!!!! How many times do I have to tell you?! You're driving me mad! Other then that, the story is very ...
Sep 24, 2009 -
Re: Prydwen Hall a novel
I love this story so much! My favorite is the old professer who ke[t falling asleep... I'm not the best reviewer, but I'm going to try my best. The description ...
Sep 24, 2009 -
Re: THE BATTLE OF THE REVENANT
I love it. It's amazingly amazing and surprisingly familiar. I like it how Latios is a vampire, but that didn't surprise me. He seemed like the vampire type. I hate ...
May 31, 2009 -
Re: One Last Chance
Amazing! I love it! Keep writing, its amazing! some gramatical errors really ticked me off, but those can be easily fixed! I liked how you made Death someone people wouldn't ...
Feb 19, 2009 -
Re: The Dream Book Chapter 2
Yes, you're grammer really is bad. Luckily, my friend's grammer is even worse than yours and I managed to decode the story. Nice second chapter. A couple things I would ...
Jan 16, 2009 -
Re: The Dream Book Chapter 1
You know, the beginning part where the local is speared to the wall reminds me of Indiana Jones.... Do you usually depend on your dreams for stories? I do... I'm ...
Dec 20, 2008 -
Re: Trick-or-treat
I won't be too meticulous, but you weren't very descriptive. You skipped a lot of information I would have liked to know... The ending was utterly dissapointing. I mean, I ...
Dec 18, 2008 -
Re: The Crystal Chronicles: Sapphire
I like it so far... I'm not such a big fan with the 'new kid' idea, but that's probably because I've used it so many times in my own stories.... ...
Dec 18, 2008 -
Re: Teenage Love
Overall, very good. I don't really see the fiction in this, because this could all really happen. But I kind of get where you're getting. Like everyone else, I suggest ...
Sep 3, 2008 -
Re: Music of the Night
That's cool. What she before me said, you need to make paragraphs. I'm not a big fan of them either, but they make the reader think that the words are ...
Sep 3, 2008 -
Re: Andrea Rider
I won't quote like everyone else did. They pretty much wrapped it up. You do know how to write, and well. Just put your story in Word and try and ...
Sep 1, 2008 -
Re: The Legacy, the Chase, My Life chapter one part one
What's the plot to this story? It sounds like you took half of chapter one and threw it on the site. I mean, you're writing's good, but you need to ...
Sep 1, 2008 -
Re: Dead
I can't say I cried. I never cry during books. But this needs some more mourning. As quoted by Gail Casron Levine, "MAKE YOUR CHARECTERS SUFFER!" I need details! I ...
Sep 1, 2008 -
Re: Avian Nights (Chapter One-- Waking Dream)
I like it. Its really good. I want to read the next chapter! You left me hanging! These are one of those stories I would stay up late at night ...
Sep 1, 2008
