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Firstly, Sapphire, awesome retelling of a fairy tale- love the other perspective and how you challenge the traditional tale. Executed really well too! I especially liked the description and imagery ...

Ok....the main critique is gonna be about the structure (the content is good but undermined by the uneven line length and forced rhyme). Is it all one stanza? I would ...

Wow, I have to say, that was pretty impressive, I'd be pretty happy with that... :P It's relevant to modern day, a dystopia similar to the style of '1984' and ...

Hey black star, I didn't really understand the context too brilliantly - was it from a group of poems? Or was it something symbolic I missed? (probably the latter) :P ...

Wow, thats really good - I don't really like critiquing lyrics without any music to accompany them, but I can really tell that it is gonna be something pretty special. ...

Its really nice, its really good how it's quite short but filled with imagery and meaning. The only nitpicking is the capitalisation of some words, but like yours with mine, ...

I'm making my way through it gradually :P It seems Esme has said just about EVERYTHING, :P, so I'm not left with a lot to write... The only thing is ...

I think it's a great poem, and I',m really struggling to find something to critique :P. I love : 'Is now a lifetime of memories Stitched together with adventure and ...

Haha I love your use of the Fratellis :P. Really drew me into it, but I couldn't remember where Stevie came into it (Chelsea Dagger, Vince The Loveable Stoner); however, ...

At last, I read it! :P One word: wow. To be honest, that was the only word which I could use to sum it up. I don't tend to remain ...

I don't know what possessed you to make such a story, but it was executed pretty damn well ;P. It reminded me a little of Holden in 'Catcher In The ...

Alright xbrokenxstar, I love how personal the poem feels when you read it, and it obviously means an awful lot to you (especially in adolescent years of identity and whatnot). ...

Alright Demeter, Loved it, its flow and rhythm is perfectly layered, and it reveals enough without being patronising to the reader. My favourite part was : 'Tell me about the ...

I loved the poem. Feminist, yet optimistic as well. Reminds me a little of Carol Ann Duffy in 'The World's Wife', and thats not a bad thing. I loved the ...

I love reading short poems, that whilst are straight to the point use imagery and ideas. That's whats happening here. I love the personification of the trees and their awakening ...