I Had a Dog
I had a dog that gave me sweet life,
But I had never once given it back.
No sooner did I find it shot me.
Then stared with its hungry eyes.
Another dog had licked hot knives,
But it always wanted to do good deeds.
Whispered well wishes under its breath,
And prayed in bed as it raped me
My third dog would look for its ball.
I soon let it be to search alone.
After awhile, I wanted to bring it home,
But no, for eternity it would search.
There was one dog that was never named.
It looked to me with pained, teary eyes.
I never did know what it wanted
When I believed in false reason.
An unruly dog drank itself blind;
Then screamed of crimson regret.
This single dog gave up all it had
To feel ev’rything, dream others’ dreams.
My last dog didn’t give up on me,
Listened to my dreams and feeble wishes.
It could never respond to these things;
So it died in wallows of vain.
And as I look back on those dogs,
I found that there was only one.
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I love this piece. It gives an air of mystery and yet tells all. At first I thought that the way you used the term "dog" was normal. But then I got the feeling that it was more about people. If it is, then I have had many a dogs. They are the same on th outside; ragged fur and a slobbery tounge, but on the inside they choose between you and begging for food at the kitchen table. They can be the friendliest of friends and the doggiest of dogs.
blacktiger3915 wrote:To be honest, I didn't get the poem at all. The poem left me asking some questions like, is the dog a man or an animal? The reason I thought this was because of the line.....Ringo_rules987 wrote:I Had a Dog
Another dog had licked hot knives
But it always wanted to do good deeds
Whispered well wishes under its breath
Prayed in bed as it raped me
Can a dog rape you or was it a metaphor for something else and I just didn't catch it. To me it was confusing and I don't like being confused. Well good luck anyway.
I loved the poem. Feminist, yet optimistic as well.
Reminds me a little of Carol Ann Duffy in 'The World's Wife', and thats not a bad thing.
I loved the second stanza, imagery was excellent, although the first stanza was a little ambiguous: 'No sooner did i find it shot me' doesn't really make a ot of sense. \Was there another 'it' meant to be put in there?
The only other qualm is the lack of punctuation, unless that was meant to symbolise something I missed.
This has got the makings for a great poem.
Sday
To be honest, I didn't get the poem at all. The poem left me asking some questions like, is the dog a man or an animal? The reason I thought this was because of the line.....
Ringo_rules987 wrote:I Had a Dog
Another dog had licked hot knives
But it always wanted to do good deeds
Whispered well wishes under its breath
Prayed in bed as it raped me
My third dog would look for its ball
I soon let it be to search alone
After awhile, I wanted bring it home
But no, eternity it would search
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