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I liked this a lot :D There were a few things that I noticed that, structurally, could be tightened... 1)While your description at the begining is fantastic it is a ...

This play was great. I loved that it was a simplistic/fast read without making the plot any more simplistic, its subject matter is a little gloomy and the tone helped ...

I read all three a couple of summers ago and remember really enjoying them... though I don't really remember them. I am pretty sure that the first was my favorite ...

I really liked this, I found it original and a little chiling. I did understand most of the twists by the end but I feel that if you could remove ...

I really loved this poem, though I do agree that the line ["You're good people, girl."] is out of place, it is unexplained. One of the few sugestions that I ...

Really enjoyed it, I think that what you're saying is all too true, your rythim was, IMO, pretty flawless. I like that you use vocabulary to keep it moving rather ...

I read Blood and Chocolate years ago and thought that it was really good, though I revisited it last summer and was disapointed. I still think that the book is ...

Hiya, me again this is the continuation of the prologue you posted, right? I really liked this and have little to critique except that you said; "The opposing cavalry killed ...

I liked this but one thing did catch my eye and it kind of ruined the rest of it for me: you said [this enthusiasm] in the third line, What ...

I really liked this, really original. This isn't so much a critique to help you develope as a writer as it is me just telling you that I like it. ...

I thought this was a very good prologue; we were introduced to the situation, the world, and who I assume will be the protagonist. The first sentence[I was indeed wrong ...

Wow, I am really impressed, are you sure you're 16?lol I think that your poem is utterly fantastic and have nothing bad to say at all. I have to sign ...

Your symbolism goal was rather well achieved, I think. Though if you add in a few more lines it might have a bit more of a plot? Also the cadence ...

I think that your story, so far, is amazing. Don't really have anything to add to the previous critiques, partly because the critiques were good, but also because I couldn't ...