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Re: (No Title Yet) Chapter 1
Hey Mateeah3! I decided to backtrack and crit this one! Let's do it. Woo! I finally post something new! I'm not sure if it is very good yet because I ...
Jun 22, 2008 -
Re: (No Title yet) Chapter 3
Hey again mateeah3! you left me hanging with the supsense on the last chapter so I decided to see what this one had in store for us! As for titles, ...
Jun 21, 2008 -
Re: Why The Boy Cried 'Wolf'!
Hey Chocoholic! Scripts aren't generally my area of expertise so feel free to shoot down any of my suggestions. Here's my crit key: Red = Comments Bold = Words I've ...
Jun 21, 2008 -
Re: (No title yet) Chapter 2
Hey mateeah3! Here's my review key: Red = Comments Bold = Words I've inserted that I think work better with your piece. Let's do this thing! I know, it is ...
Jun 21, 2008 -
Re: Bending Over Backwards
Hey note to self! Welcome to YWS! Here's my crit key: Red = Comments Bold = words I've inserted that I think work better Let's do this thing! While all ...
Jun 20, 2008 -
Re: The tears of the dead: Prolouge
Hey happybear, Here's my review key: Red = Comments Bold = Stuff I've inserted that I think sounds better Let's do this thing! A wail sounded in the usualy quiet ...
Jun 20, 2008 -
Re: Poisoned Roses--Chapter 6
Hey again Ashley! Here's my review! Hope it helps! Okay, I know that I haven't fixed Chapter 5 yet, and I normally do that before I post another chapter. But ...
Jun 19, 2008 -
Re: Members of the Vast Conspiracy
Hey CrazyBob! Welcome to YWS! Anyway here's my review key: Red = Comments Bold = word I've inserted that I think would work better Let's do this thing. My father ...
Jun 17, 2008 -
Re: A Conversation over Muffins
Hey again careless! Here's my review, same critique key as always! I know you're not supposed to give an introduction, but I feel that this piece needs one. I hope ...
Jun 17, 2008 -
Re: After the Night
Hey Pinata! Long time no review! Anyway, here's my review key: Red = Commetns Bold = Words I've inserted that I think work better with your piece. Let's do this ...
Jun 17, 2008 -
Re: The Scient Witch. Chapter 1, Part 1.
Hey Spazztard! Sorry for the delayed critique. I was away this past weekend, Anyway here's the key: Red = Comments Bold = Words I've inserted that I think sound better ...
Jun 17, 2008 -
Re: Elemental Dragons - Prologue and Chapter 1
Hey Whisperer! Here's my review key: Red = Comments Bold = words I've inserted that I think work better. Elemental Dragons *Inspired by the movie, Eragon Prologue Long ago, in ...
Jun 13, 2008 -
Re: Remember His Name
Hey Casstic! Here's my review key: Red = Comments Bold = Words I've inserted that I think work better. Let's do this thang! He told me he was in love ...
Jun 13, 2008 -
Re: Raisin Hell (2/2)
Hey there Sam! Let's see whatcha got! Same review key as my last one: Carl went back to work on the first day of the Hindu festival of Diwali. He ...
Jun 13, 2008 -
Re: Death by Scotch
Hey again Angel, since I read the first one, I wanted to read the sequal. Here's my review! You might be confused if you read this first so go back ...
Jun 13, 2008