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Hey Mateeah3! I decided to backtrack and crit this one! Let's do it. Woo! I finally post something new! I'm not sure if it is very good yet because I ...

Hey again mateeah3! you left me hanging with the supsense on the last chapter so I decided to see what this one had in store for us! As for titles, ...

Hey Chocoholic! Scripts aren't generally my area of expertise so feel free to shoot down any of my suggestions. Here's my crit key: Red = Comments Bold = Words I've ...

Hey mateeah3! Here's my review key: Red = Comments Bold = Words I've inserted that I think work better with your piece. Let's do this thing! I know, it is ...

Hey note to self! Welcome to YWS! Here's my crit key: Red = Comments Bold = words I've inserted that I think work better Let's do this thing! While all ...

Hey happybear, Here's my review key: Red = Comments Bold = Stuff I've inserted that I think sounds better Let's do this thing! A wail sounded in the usualy quiet ...

Hey again Ashley! Here's my review! Hope it helps! Okay, I know that I haven't fixed Chapter 5 yet, and I normally do that before I post another chapter. But ...

Hey CrazyBob! Welcome to YWS! Anyway here's my review key: Red = Comments Bold = word I've inserted that I think would work better Let's do this thing. My father ...

Hey again careless! Here's my review, same critique key as always! I know you're not supposed to give an introduction, but I feel that this piece needs one. I hope ...

Hey Pinata! Long time no review! Anyway, here's my review key: Red = Commetns Bold = Words I've inserted that I think work better with your piece. Let's do this ...

Hey Spazztard! Sorry for the delayed critique. I was away this past weekend, Anyway here's the key: Red = Comments Bold = Words I've inserted that I think sound better ...

Hey Whisperer! Here's my review key: Red = Comments Bold = words I've inserted that I think work better. Elemental Dragons *Inspired by the movie, Eragon Prologue Long ago, in ...

Hey Casstic! Here's my review key: Red = Comments Bold = Words I've inserted that I think work better. Let's do this thang! He told me he was in love ...

Hey there Sam! Let's see whatcha got! Same review key as my last one: Carl went back to work on the first day of the Hindu festival of Diwali. He ...

Hey again Angel, since I read the first one, I wanted to read the sequal. Here's my review! You might be confused if you read this first so go back ...