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Hey. To start off, what I most enjoyed of the poem was the repetition of the first line, at the end. I'm a sucker for that rhetorical device. A line ...

I feel rather separated from this poem, when I should actually relate to it. I think you should delve more into the sadness of it. Also, it is not really ...

Aqua, what a wonderful poem! I actually thought you conveyed the implied theme of this poem quite nicely, and the way you tied the last line to the poem was ...

THIS POEM IS PERFECT! Honestly not really sure how to review it, other than that one typo from "you" to "your". I love how cute this is, and if it ...

Hey Demoness! This is a very interesting poem. I enjoy how you took the two items, wishing and hoping, and contrasted them to each other as opposed to how humans ...

Hi Skittles! I wanted to say I enjoyed your plot, and you did a good job of captivating the setting and using imagery! I would recommend to you to evolve ...

I love this so very much as I can relate. I thought this poem was pure, and delicate AND straight-forward. I can't find anything severely wrong with it. I thought ...

Hi! Just a little nit-picky thing, I would capitalize Butterflies to introduce your poem. This poem really says a lot, I'm guessing you can interpret it as a young love, ...

This is a very strong topic to write about. My suggestion would be to center your poem on this one central topic; therefore, change/tweak your introduction. Your first two stanzas ...

Hey! This is very creative, and I really enjoyed it. Despite your grammatical errors, and some spelling issues (e.g. should be descent, not decent) you created your picture quite clearly. ...

I like it! To me, it was like part fairy tale, part mystery! That is quite original. KLoveLace already pointed out some stuff :) So here are a few typos/corrections: ...

A lot of misspellings, I would go back and review them. The plot seems to be quite slow and does not have a destination. When you start the poem by ...

Beautiful poem! A very commendable piece of work. You have captured the essence of sharing an intimate moment with the reader, and that is what is most remarkable about this ...

So charming! I found this piece to have extremely well diction, fluid sentence structure, vividly detailed, etc. etc. I also love this sentence: "Perhaps that mindset is exactly why adventure ...

Sentences/Fragments I liked: "Green eyes thoughtful." -especially after the way you repeated it at the end. That gave a very nice finish to the piece, and really strikes a chord ...