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This is really good :) I like the way you put in... "Of the eight tiny spiders you swallow in your Lifetime " I also like the structure of it, ...

I very much like this poem. :) And it doesn't matter that it doesn't rhyme as they don't have to...you're the writer you can do what you like with it ...

First of all, i didn't really like the idea of this because the idea is very old and used too much. I think it needs more depth to it, instead ...

In some parts this didn't seem well. But in other parts it did. :) I quite liked it all in all. Nice imagery and such. :D Well done.

Wow i like this new edited version. :D Once thing though... "I called her that from the first time we talked. She didn't seem to mind and so the nickname ...

Wow, this is very morbid and sad but i like it all the same. I love the idea you've used... "Protecting by bleeping machines, not family." Is this meant to ...

Oooh, i like this very much. I like the descriptiveness. My favorite bit is: "Create an uproar of colours, Golden brown hurricane. " I can't use the quotey box as ...

Oooof, i really like this whole story. I like the flashback you use. Maybe this piece should of been along with the fourth that the flashback was alltogether? But that's ...

Niiiiiiiice. We're getting to know more now, yay! :D I really like how descriptive you are getting. I can also see how much you've improved looking at this and looking ...

I like this...the idea is good and i rekon it flows allright. You should let Miss Standerline read this at school, she'd love you for it. Very feminist..showing how we ...

I like this. The rhyming is good but it's heard quite alot in Tim Burton-esque poetry books. If that makes sence... I like how it ends, even though it's sad, ...

Another good poem. :) I have nothing bad to say about it. lol Your writing style is ace! :D x

This was amazing. You have a good rhyhm to the poem, the rhyming was great too. You also use interesting words to describe things which keeps me interested. Yep. Basically, ...

Oh my gosh, short and sweet! :D I really like your style of writing. I have read your poem about monsters under the bed too and i liked that just ...

I really like this, and i like the point you are making (if that makes sence). I know this has been said, but i would definetly type things on word ...