sabradan

Ok. before I get into a review, a general comment: Make the text bigger (slightly) and make sure your formatting works. I'm an old Postgraduate student, who spends his day ...

Yay! I'm super excited y'all like it so. How wonderful! the CCF song is perfect. You know us so well, CL. :shock: I wonder if that is a bad thing, ...

I agree with all the above posters...took all my ideas. Except for two: First, the idea behind the poem is great. Good psychic weight. However, this leads me to point ...

This is really good, I just have a few small issues. One, is repetition. I understand that you are doing it for a specific purpose, but for some reason, it ...

Honestly, I'm not a fan of the whole "conversation" style. I don't like it when people write poetry as they talk, and its because while they may be entertaining (yours ...

*Ahem* First things first: END RHYME IS THE GREAT SATAN. NEVER, EVER, EVER, USE IT. (Unless, you are a VERY skilled poet and are using it for a specific reason, ...

Jules, that's just ridiculous. Anyway, I just finished it in 6 hours. Tried to pace myself so I could savour it. There's some horrible sad moments, I came close to ...

My good friend, Harry Potter came out when I was in grade 4, and I do know they are easy to read. But the point I was getting across (this ...

TTAP. Typical Teenage Angst Poetry. I stopped reading after the first stanza. Try fixing up your diction and having a clearer message you want to convery. That way, even if ...

It was really short. There was no structure, at all. Furthermore, all it seemed like it was a random collection of words surrounding a theme. I think if you worked ...

I never much like E.E. Cummings or his style, as I found it hard to read, annoying and distracting. Therefore, those who attempt to copy said style are I also ...

I don't really have time to do a full critique as of right now, but for now I will say this: SHOW ME Don't TELL ME. This is not a ...

Welcome, Dying Immortal - My advice is to get your head out of your butt and your pen out of your navel. Not even mentioning the moronic meandering and didactic ...

*headdesk* The YWS is not a place for people to post rubbish and say "LOOK WHAT I CAN DO!" and we are all supposed to say "Good job! You can ...

Jiggity, The best part of this poem was the unique use of punctuation. I understood the meaning and feeling in the poem, but unfortunately (or fortunately, depending on your view ...