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Re: Rage
hello! Paavnithare great work, nice flow of ideas, pretty good wording,I'll say. Roy, here to give an idea. How about writing this piece into poem forms? I think this can ...
Oct 19, 2016 -
Re: The Case of Schadel Kueper - Chapter 1 - Part II
Hello Mage. Roy, here to review your work. First I'll say this is great work,though I didn't come across the part (I) of this. I think if you can show ...
Oct 19, 2016 -
Re: CandyLand Chapter 2 (Restart)
Hello! Poseidon. Great work I'll say. Am Roy and am here to do a bit review of your work. I didn't come across chapter one of CandyLand but I think ...
Oct 17, 2016 -
Re: My Nights(Part 2)
Great work Casanova.Roy and am here to review. The fact that the persona's subject was smiling and bright a half an hour ago and now is cold makes me understand ...
Oct 14, 2016 -
Re: Painting Roses
Great work DeepRoses.Royevans,here to review your work. If its a poem I think creating rhythm will make it interesting and in the process create some musicality in it. And with ...
Oct 14, 2016 -
Re: not afraid to say
Yakitsa, I'll say great work. If its a poem I think creating rhythm will make it greater. I)..his eyes are wild... how about showing us him us being wild than ...
Oct 14, 2016 -
Re: Whomerlock Chapter 11
Dracula, great work I'll say. Roy and am here to review your work. First,I like how you create the tension. You've shown more than telling, which is great but how ...
Oct 14, 2016 -
Re: These words are my chains
I'll say good work Justlitteoleme. I think mentioning these words that are your chain can make it sound great. That will bring out clearly the gap between these superfluous and ...
Oct 13, 2016
