rothwise

Hello! I liked this poem - just a couple of things for you to watch. Watch capitalization, and watch your commas. You have some that aren't needed in some places, ...

Surely not the worst written! Not close. I do love this, a lot. Isn't it funny how our best works are done when we're barely thinking about what we're writing, ...

When I first read the title I was like "Hmm.......Let me go check this out." Needless to say I love the title, really. The poem itself? I'm kind of wavering ...

I really do like this a lot! It's fabulous, really. I'll admit that it made me giggle all the way through it, and then getting to the end made me ...

only one thing i think you should change, and that is that in the second line it should be "too" :) other than that I found everything perfectly fine! I ...

wow this is really good :) i just have one thing to tell you: in the third line of the first stanza, you might want to change it to "Has ...

aw this was really sweet :) that's such a good idea for a present! i loved the poem and you only had like a few minor errors that i'm not ...

this is very well done! i totally get the deep meaning behind it, ya know? lol you have soooo many reviews it's so funny :) you have only minor mistakes, ...

this...didn't make sense to me. i've read and critiqued a lot of poetry before. but this just made no sense. where does D-Day come into this? none of the lines ...

Hey there. couple of mistakes, i'll list them: the third and sixth stanza are only three lines. the rest are four...i would suggest adding another line to each of these. ...

couple of grammer mistakes, which i'll list for you: the last sentence in the first stanza...the first word shouldn't be "dont" but "aren't" the whole third stanza doesnt rhyme. i ...

i think this is sweet :) it's really...deep and i totally understand it. You're, like, an amazing poet so totally keep writing!!! the ending, i couldn't stop laughing. Not from ...

that is really quite a nice poem. You might want to check how long your lines are though because it sounds a little off in some of the stanzas. Other ...

you're really good and you have potential :) i think, though, that you do have a couple puncuation errors all throughout the story which i just want to point out. ...

lovely poem, made me really think. You're really good and I like it a lot. You may have either dropped the sappiness sometimes or did it too much, but in ...