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  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The Sound Of Silence

    Hello, I’m Roon, nice to meet you. I’m not good with introductions, so I’ll head straight onto the review. I wish I had the screaming back, to drown out the ...

    Aug 15, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Can't Help But Live

    Hi, I’m Roon, nice to meet you. I quite liked this, but I think, if you improved it a little, I would love it! It has potential, it’s nice and ...

    Aug 14, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Awake

    Hi, Roon here, I thought this was really interesting, which is why I’m here, so here goes: I lay awake, < I think this should be lie. The rest of ...

    Aug 11, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Mechanic, Chapter 1

    Hey, Crocks. Look! A review: Things in red aren't essential and could probably be taken out, but it's personal choice. Red = ramble, make sure everything is pointful. Fairthen wasn’t ...

    Aug 11, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Our Field

    Past the tall grass and through the field, two lovers lie and never yield. In the sun's warmth The lovers kiss, With true passion And magic bliss. I really love ...

    Aug 11, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The wrong seasons

    I don’t think that’s entirely fair, because poems can be light-hearted too, it just may not be your thing. The summer has lately gotten colder, And the winter is shockingly ...

    Aug 11, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Breathe in, breathe out.

    Hi, I think this poem has real potential, there are just a couple of things that you need to do to make it brilliant. The words you said to me, ...

    Aug 11, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Fingernail Marks

    I like this, the last two lines were wonderful. I don’t mind the italics, but the underlining, I don’t like. Also, the osmosis reference, I don’t like it. I don’t ...

    Aug 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: I'm taking the risk

    I don't think it matters that it's short, I really liked it, it's to the point and sweet. I was sceptical when I started reading, I didn’t think it was ...

    Aug 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Darkness

    “Darkness is only a vivid illusion, An absence of light, they might call. Darkness, dark, blackness and whatsoever, Still it is darkness, no care, no hope.” You shouldn’t have a ...

    Aug 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Hard Breakup

    This is really unique, you don’t see much conversational poetry, as aspiringauthor17 said. It was good to see a new slant on a break-up. I really like it, you get ...

    Aug 8, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Unraveling

    Hi, so this is interesting. I like the unraveling element, I think that could really bring life to this poem if you used it in the right way. When I ...

    Aug 6, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: [In]Sane

    Well, AngerManagement seems to have got all the grammar niggles, so I won't repeat that. I think you need to be a little more original with some of the aspects ...

    Aug 6, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: save my vanity(edited not much but cleaned up)

    Roon here! Nitpicks first! We all give excuses to live as one humanity...

    Nov 10, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Removed #8

    Hello, Roon here! First off, can I say, I really loved this. There’s something that poetry needs, that’s totally indescribable, but this has it. NITPICKS: Silence in her silhouette scorches ...

    Oct 25, 2009


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