Published August 11, 2010
The summer has lately gotten colder,
And the winter is shockingly warm,
And autumn gets a little bit brighter,
And spring without one single storm.
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The Earth's mood must be going crazy,
Or I've just gone out of my mind,
And that's when I look to the fridge door,
My calendar's six months behind.
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I don’t think that’s entirely fair, because poems can be light-hearted too, it just may not be your thing.
Okay, I wouldn’t say ‘shockingly‘, and the rhyme eats this verse up a little. The first line is oddly phrased, it feels like you should be saying gotten colder lately, but obviously that wouldn’t rhyme, could you think of another way to word this, or to rhyme the third line with it, otherwise just leave it, it‘s not an eyesore or anything. I think you could add another verse, it would benefit the poem, it feels short, and I want to hear more from it!
A good twist. I think you should end with an exclamation mark. The rhyme works well in this verse, and it flows really well.
I think it was sweet, I like reading things like this every now and again. If humour is your style, keep at it, don’t let other people put you off, after all some of the most memorable poems ever written have been funny. For example:
So, I hope this helps, if you ever need another review, just ask!
~Roon
This poem seems like its not serious, and you got it from some joke website or something. Next time, make something more serious. I don't like this because its too short and not meaningful.