rissymay

Hello. I read your story and the comments other people left on this, so I am going to try and use my brain to give you the best tips I ...

hello, i will probably finish the second part tomorrow or a few days after... i will try my best. So here's mah stuff: Weary and on edge, Fox's army lost ...

Hello, I'm rissymay here for a review: It's very interesting how your MC is blind. Not often do you read about a blind person... concerning the last line: perhaps you ...

hello, rissymay here for a review... I think you did a good job describing and making your characters different from each other. The whole thing kinda lacks interest... it'd be ...

Hello, and welcome to Young Writer's Society! :D I'm rissymay here to review your lovely story. I like the beginning- good job pulling the reader in. gets me interested. the ...

hello, rissymay again, here for a review :P I don't know if I like the flow from band camp to English class- maybe have her start in English class and ...

rissymay reporting for a review! I love the idea of the POV being from a leaf. One thought right from the start: what if there were some humans who would ...

hello... i have read your wonderful little story, and I shall now review it... I really like the beginning, it gets me interested. On the topic of getting interested, good ...

hello, rissymay here for a review! The beginning isn't very original- I've read so many beginnings similar to that. I'd suggest changing it so it pulls the reader in right ...

nice story you have here! Here's what I thought: Initially, the first sentences don't really make the reader interested. The part about the shifting religion caused some interest in me, ...

hello! rissymay here for a review The very first line is chilling, and makes me interested, but then the second kinda kills the feeling because it doesn't match the first ...

An interesting thought... I love how these two simple lines make so many questions surface in my mind. I'm honestly now thinking a lot about pigeons XD One of the ...

Not sure what to think of the periods between paragraphs. My suggestion is to just get rid of them and make transitions between paragraph so it flows nicely, and then ...

Hello, rissymay here for a review. I don't usually review poetry and probably suck at it, so... don't any of my advice if you don't agree with it :D i ...

hello, rissymay here for a review... I'm not really liking the very beginning- it doesn't sound professional, and for some reason, (it's just a personal preference) I don't like it ...