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For me the only saving grace for this poem is this. The days became colder and so did you I love that line completely. It will have been said before, ...

Hey, well done. You have summed something up in a stanza, which other's would have slaved over stanza after stanza to create. Truly excellent. I loved it. It feels so ...

This poem hurt my head :( The thing is the rhyme is to much, like others have said before. I only found out today what forced rhyme was as it ...

Hello. I don't know what to make of it, if I'm being honest. Parts of it I find pure gold and other parts I think need destroying. For me it ...

Hey, i think personally that the last two lines kind of ruin the poem, not because of the fact that they are badly written because they're written good. It's because ...

Hey, I was hooked from the first line, it sounded like my kind of piece. :pirate2: :mrgreen: It feels like it is moving way to fast though, i think it ...

Hey, This is really well written, but there is just one thing. It doesn't have the feel of someone being stolen, it feels like the person has been left, but ...

errrm well it's okay, i have read worse. You have tried to hard with this poem, and if this is what you were trying to write, you should have called ...

Hello, I shall be your reviewer. Right, i shall start with the positives. It's amazing. I like your storyline and i think it could turn into an amazing novel. I ...

That I clawed out my very own heart for nothing That even your saline teeth itch— I think these are the two best lines in the piece. This is rather ...

Right, the first thing i'm going to say, is that you need to work on the spelling in the piece, and you need to put and instead of n, also ...

God, help me..." she murmured. Still the sickening smell of burning flesh and the blood-curdling sound of horrified screams of pain and death assaulted her other senses, and made her ...

Personally, i feel that the theme of the poem changes throughout it. I think you stanza about the bottle and guilt is rather good, and if i was you, i ...

J.Lo's baby has three heads London bomb kills ten The order that has been written in is interesting. I think it shows how truly interested the world is about things. ...

I like most of this poem A fine layer of frost coats the world. Then, a blanket of white. As the temperature drops, Comes the fear of frostbite. I just ...