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Hey, I'm sorry if this is a true story that has happened to you. The thing about the story is, you kinda knew from the off what was going to ...

Hey, I'm going to use my analogy of scaled. A perfect poem is perfectly balanced between description and emotion, this, is completely stilted. It feels like you've tried excessivly hard ...

Hey, I think this could really work as a romantic story. But it would have to be written like this all the way through. The colour purple by Alice Walker ...

Hey, I had to read it twice, it confused me! :) Okay, it was good, but far too short. It was more about the song than the dream, i'd swapped ...

Hey, This is amazingly deep. I usually loathe when people go from normal to bold writing but it created an obvious subtleness which I loved. My critic though is your ...

Hey, This is in the wrong catergory, it should be in short story :) It was good and very moving, well done. It go through with a fine comb as ...

Hey, I like it, it wasn't what I was expecting at all. I no longer can comprehend what direction my life is going in. I no longer have control. There ...

HEY! Coral, You know what I say ever time I review you, about the scales, I am glad to say I don't need to write it! You've done it, I ...

HEY! Making it up as you go along is a good basis for just make a poem basis, it needs to built on. It is very under-punctuated. and i'm taking ...

Hey! I liked it, but, as you wanted an opinion here is mine. The use of addressing the reader as the person in the piece does not work here I ...

Hi, This is meant to be a comparison essay so I'm going on what I have been taught about them. It is very biased which it is not meant to ...

Tiger! I think the problem is the rhyme. It is far to force and bleeds the poem dry. it makes everything you're writing extremely cliché and makes the piece redundant. ...

Hey, i think this is a very clever idea. To start of with I wasn't sure where you were going with it, but I think you pulled it off. However, ...

Hey, The content was good but difficult to read as it was just one big bit of text. I would break it up into stanzas and then try and change ...

Hello my dear, The imagery in here was astounding and beautiful so well done. owever, like I seem to say reguarly that the poem needs to be balanced, and I ...