retrodisco666

Hey Retro here to do a little reviewing! First off just want to say how i like the message behind the poem. I myself have been subject to doing things ...

Hey! First thing i'd like to say is that i really like this poem, but i don't really know if i would have gotten the metaphor if you hadn't mentiones ...

Hey! First of all i think your idea is quite good :) There is just one or two little things that i think would make it better. "She learns with ...

Hello there! A nice dark and mysterious poem; i love it. I particually like your form., good enjambement and creates a rather lucid pace. I like the ending, the just ...

HI! I liked the first one as it had very little form, much like that of E.E.Cumings, and i liked what you were writing about. So I don't really have ...

Hi! I liked this :) My first comment would be could you condense some of the stanzas? When I saw it, it seems like a lot of stanzas but I ...

Hi! Well weirdish was accurate :) but none-the-less I liked it. I don't get the first line though. have I missed something with that? I think the third stanza however, ...

This was truly incredible. It reminded me of a Dr Jekyll and Mr Hyde type scenario :) I have a question, where is this set? When I started reading it ...

Hi! I really liked this :) I liked the fact, the i is not capitalised, and no capital letters, it reminds me of poets who like this, decided the asthetic ...

Hi! I like everything your written here :) though I'd work on your form. If you look at a poem called the raven by e.a.Poe and looked at his form, ...

Hi! The first thing I'd suggest is the title. I think I'd change it to something Like a one word; cutter, maybe? I like the sardonic tone of the final ...

Hi I like the want for a dream concept, :) The repetition of any dream will do, I think this hinders the poem rather than aids it, maybe just at ...

Hi. I like how it has very little form, almost like an E.E.Cummings poem (just with a little more form) One thing I would not change is capital letters. Make ...

Hi! I really liked this, it reminded me of days by phillip larkin (part is in my signature, check it out) I would seperate it into two stanzas personally, to ...

HELLO! I love food related poems so it's an immediate winner :D I think what really makes this poem is the depth of your descriptions, though a few more adjectives ...