reaganpark

Wow, this is good. It's really powerful and emotional- I love how you described everything. It really made me stop and think. I know someone already said it, but I ...

I really like this! It's cute and sweet, and it doesn't go on forever either. I don't really have any nitpicks, except that I agree that you should make it ...

This is really depressing! :( I liked it, though. I think it would be a lot better if you added paragraphs. It would make it easier to read, and easier ...

This is really good! I love the rhythm, and the wording. Everything was described really well- I could see it clearly in my head. This reminded me of the end ...

I really like the first three lines. I agree with the other reviewers in how you need more information, like when she actually starts feeling forced into it, and stuff ...

This was a good story, but I kept getting distracted by the paragraphs. They're really squished together, and there are some spots where you could separate one paragraph into two ...

She didn't know that she was perfect on the outside,And no one else knew she was broken on the inside. I really like the ending lines.... this is a good ...

Wow this is amazing! I really, really, really like it! I loved the twist where she sees her first kid! Omygoshthisisreallygood. please make a part three! I'm begging. :D I ...

I really liked this! I love your description of the dream. There were some parts that confused me, but that happens a lot in first chapters... I'm guessing it will ...

This was good! I really enjoyed reading it. I guess it was just your way of sayin' Life is just a grave in waitin'. I like these lines a lot, ...

I loved this! haha it made me laugh all the way through. I really agree with the shorts thing- it really annoys me to see girls walking around wearing stuff ...

Ok, first of all, I think this was really good. I love how she slides down the mountain in a watermelon. The image is just really funny in my head. ...

This is amazing! I was hooked from the beginning. I love the taps that you put between the sentences. Everything was really dramatic, and it had really strong emotions. I ...

This is a cool story. It was really powerful, it showed her emotions really well. They make everything "normal," but they leave you behind in the process. I really like ...

Wow, this is amazing! I was hooked from the very beginning. I loved the way you described everything- not giving a ton of details, but still giving enough important ones ...