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Re: Together? No.
i liked it! it had powerful emotions and nice imagery and makes the reader use their imagination and really gets them thinking Rushing streams wake my subconscious from it's colorful ...
Jan 12, 2011 -
Re: The Cave
Hi this seemed like more of a story than a poem but it was good and i liked the images. as i read along i expected a dramatic ending with ...
Apr 15, 2010 -
Re: Becoming a Star - prologue
I'm sorry but i can't say i liked this. it's just a personal thing, i'm not a big fan of the narrator talking to the reader. eg: How about you? ...
Apr 10, 2010 -
Re: Lightning Platoon 106 ch. 1 part 1
hi this wasn't too much of an info dump, but if you're worried about it maybe you could make some of the information into a news paper article thats lying ...
Apr 10, 2010 -
Re: My Snowman (Revised)
haha! I really loved this, it was cool. My best friend is a snowman. I made him just last night. With a hat and carrot nose, that suit him just ...
Apr 10, 2010 -
Re: New
beautiful peice you have here, just wonderful Just trying to forget But it's not that easy That's something people don't get The things i think it would be better if ...
Apr 8, 2010 -
Re: more random poems
i like the way you repeated 'black hair, black clothes' through out the poem. when most people try that it sounds bad, but this flowed nicely. what i don't understand ...
Mar 3, 2010 -
Re: random poems
i agree with fighta but i dont think that the rhyme in the first poem sounded forced, i think it flowed quite nicely. Face burnt beyond any hope of being ...
Mar 3, 2010 -
Re: Death
"I value my Gram." I think you meant gran Why valentines day? why not something closer to New year to make it make more sense? Overall it was good and ...
Mar 3, 2010 -
Re: wounded part 1 (plz comment
I couldn’t tell you when it happened. Maybe it was when my parents decided they where (were, not where) going to “take a little break”. Maybe it was when my ...
Feb 23, 2010
