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Re: Ghost Hospital
First review in a while! I am so happy I ran into a this story, I was dying to read a horror story. Anyways, to the point. Everything here looks ...
Dec 17, 2013 -
Re: Snow: The Tale of a Cold Heart (Prologue)
Hello, Rainbow Cabbit here! Merciless, you say? Don't worry, I am obsessed with prologues in a way. Overall, this is a pretty good story. You put good imagery with the ...
Nov 16, 2013 -
Re: Possessed: Chapter Two
Alright, Rainbow Cabbit here for another review! First of all, your story is still amazing. Again, I love how you try to make things realistic. The way you describe the ...
Nov 16, 2013 -
Re: Possessed: Chapter One
Hey! Rainbow Cabbit here to review your lovely story. Your story was great, and I absolutely loved the cliffhanger at the end. Also, I found how you made Donna really ...
Nov 16, 2013 -
Re: Asenath:Tears on the Sand Chapter 1
OK. So the imagery in the beginning of your story was awesome. I also like the plot. It's realistic and it puts cliche to a whole new setting. However, when ...
Nov 4, 2013 -
Re: The Descent Chapter 10: The Kiss Part 3
I have no idea what this is from, and I haven't read any of the other chapters, but I like this chapter. You have real good tone and voice. I ...
Nov 4, 2013 -
Re: My Brother's Betrayal
Oh my goodness? Did that really happen to you? If so, I'm sorry to hear that. Even so, it is a very interesting short story. You really express the confusion ...
Oct 29, 2013 -
Re: .
Hey! Rainbow Cabbit here to review your work! Oh, and by the way, welcome to YWS (the Greenroom told me you are new). I really love the whole doll idea ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Undecided Title :)
Hello! I really like your story so far. I like how you fully described the scene of near death and the commotion between the wolves. I also love how the ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: The Game Chapters 4 and 5
Hello! Rainbow Cabbit here! This is a rather interesting story. I love the development of the characters in the story. You did a really great job with Mason and Elijah. ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Heroes Fall
Ok, Rainbowcabbit once again here for review day! So, I really loved your story. Your characters are amazingly developed. I was amused at Darius's horrible and immature behavior and loved ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Illegally in Love, Chapter 1
Hey :D So you finally joined! Well welcome to YWS. One, I like the plot and how you made the civilization so casually there. Unfortunately, I think you should add ...
Oct 21, 2013 -
Re: The Prophecy
This sounds interesting. I actually had an idea once similar to this XD ironically. Your prologue is amazing: I love how you ended it with a threat from the sister. ...
Oct 13, 2013 -
Re: Adventures of the Pokemon Journalist - Chapter 1 Part 1
Ok, so you wanted me to review your piece. XD I ain't gonna argue with that! Free points! First, I like the humor and emotion of the story a lot. ...
Oct 8, 2013 -
Re: Fictional Letters: Anomie's first letter to Ishma
I wish I could write such long and helpful reviews as my buddy Hannah...but anyways, I do like this piece. Yes, its fictional, but the strong diction and content really ...
Sep 29, 2013
