rachellecarter

This is amazing! I like what you did with it! You changed it so the Nazi's seem more like people (just like we talked about). Good job! I like this ...

Thanks! I wanted Derek to be respectable for that reason. I'm sure that there were Nobles that weren't terrible, but you never hear about them and so that is why ...

Thanks for the input! Lots of people said that they didn't understand that line. I need to change it (But honestly, I don't know what to change it to haha). ...

Will do. I'm up for a good challenge :)

What I meant was that it would be nice if the story had a more solid plot, I guess. But you did great as it is.

Also, something I just thought of, you might want to review the title. It should be gripping. You don't have to, it was just a suggestion.

Haha. I am glad I could be of help.

It's a great story! And no worries, I am terrible with description. Either I add too much or too little lol. Good luck :)

Thanks! It's nice to know that the first chapter was at least a little interesting. I agree that it was short, and I am planning on making it longer. Once ...

Hey, it's your writing not mine! :) It's really good. And I'm glad I could help in anyway possible :)

What did I just read?

I will definitely spend the next little while actually figuring out what my characters are like, because honestly, I have no idea now that you mention it. :) Thanks for ...

Thanks! :)

You're welcome! I know what it's like to want my writing to actually be reviewed. Fluff really isn't my thing. Good luck with your writing!

Thanks!