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I liked this a lot. You did a really great job capturing the feel of a rural area and the people that live there. There were a few places where ...

Brian’s idea of “other plans” was one that had been presented to Lester before. This is kind of awkward-sounding… Maybe something like, “Lester was familiar with Brian’s idea of ‘other ...

Hey, this was an interesting read, and I liked the play on I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings. No more playing, no more toys, no more joking , no ...

Hey, this was really great! Just a few nitpicks... The year before I was in northwest of Tevena. This year I made sure I was in the city so that ...

Hey, welcome to YWS. This is really good. It has some really neat things going on with the water imagery, contrasts, and the repetition at the end. And all of ...

Ooh, I like this. Very metaphorical. There were a few grammar issues, nothing horrible, but here are my nitpicks... the image of my bathroom is still burn s . Everything ...

First of all, welcome to YWS! I hope you like it here and don't hesitate to ask me any questions. Nitpicks/Comments/Suggestions nor could it prevent wash away the ink of ...

You just gave me a review and I wanted to return the favor. c: You have a lot of great, original imagery here. My favorite lines are the first, third, ...

I remembered who crazy-guy reminds me of! Benjy Compson from The Sound and the Fury . I think I partially repressed that book from my memory, haha. A crazy guy ...

Lester blushed, which was not flattering on for his pale and freckly complexion. Why are you so confident in this?” This didn’t sound conversational enough… “Why do you think it’ll ...

Nitpicks My thoughts interrupted my dream and stopped it immediately. This seems like a strange thing to say – how can your thoughts interrupt a dream? Therefore it’s not the ...

Hi there. You said you were looking for reviews. ; ) I'm not very good at reviewing poetry, but I can try. You have a nice little poem here. I ...

Hi again. This is still fantastic. I'll start with my nitpicks. The opening song started. Super Friends, we always stick together Why the extra line break…? A teenager with long, ...

Hi, World! I posted on your welcome thread and I'm here to review your story. :D This was really good! So imaginative. I really liked the world and the characters ...

No, no it doesn't suck. c: Now, I have no idea what the connection is between the three sections, but the sections on their own are great. 1st section Nice ...