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Re: Lucid dreams
Some wonderful phrases here, but the style and structure of the poem needs to be more cohesive and determined. It wanders about so randomly... to make the poem lucid you ...
Nov 28, 2006 -
Re: Lucid dreams
Rated G. Elaborate?
Nov 28, 2006 -
Re: A lack of color...
You have improved! I'm so proud!
Apr 25, 2006 -
Re: Teenager Recollections
oh and I think it would make for a great song
Dec 20, 2005 -
Re: Teenager Recollections
Wow. I just love your work. Nice rhythm in this one. And it speaks to me. Hate it when people use cuz instead of 'cause though, but I’ll forgive you. ...
Dec 20, 2005 -
Re: Wise Cotton-Candy Quest
Nice Nice. I just love your choice of words.
Dec 4, 2005 -
Re: When everything is clear
quote="bubblewrapped"]I just gotta tell you, I love your avatar. It's hilarious! :lol: Unfortunately (dont hate me!) I dont feel the same way about your poem. Everything is not clear- there ...
Dec 2, 2005 -
Re: Lucid dreams
poetic reply :D :D
Dec 1, 2005 -
Re: When everything is clear
hahaha, thx! I know that sugar is sweet. But sometimes things are so ugly they are beautifull.:P
Dec 1, 2005 -
Re: -Untitled-
Corrections; 8 years or so. Also stop using slang grammar such as cuz, write 'cause. Proper grammer hun! don't succumb to the internet slang thing!
Dec 1, 2005 -
Re: Life and Death (Modified)
much much better!
Dec 1, 2005