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The truth is that this needs a little bit more work. When reading it, i couldn't help but feel slightly confused, not by the story line but by the wordings. ...

hmmm...its good, really. The grammar is good, not the best but very good. My only problem is that you leave out some simple punctuations. For example, you make the words ...

like everyone said before me, your poem is very and i mean VERY relatable. Anyway, it was quite well written and the grammar was good. Also you did well in ...

Hmmm, reading this was a very and i mean VERY interesting experience for me since it brought me to light with your creativity. The "r" just lacked a bit of ...

First of all, when i read the title, i kinda felt a little...funny (can't use a different word). Anyway, i really liked it especially how you relate the female body ...

Well, all in was really good. i even kinda understood the feeling behind it all. But there might have been one or two mistakes. I say "might" because those mistakes ...

ok, am not here to flame you. Just to be honest, i thought of stealing your writing to present it as an essay i"ve been told to write about. Anyway, ...

Well, i don't know what to say. Though it was well written and stuff. For me it was hard to actually get a real meaning to it all. But all ...

Well, there's no complain i have about how good this is. When i read it, it feels like am a guy looking at a goddess. To tell the truth, am ...

Uhhhhhh...ok? Well, kinda can't explain how i felt about the poem. Narrative poems were never things of my heart but i guess i wanted to try reading this first. To ...

Ok, Primrose22, i won't lie to you. The poem might have some chance to become great, but that's it...a slim chance. As for the rhyming issue, well, i've seen a ...

ok, so it was impressive. When i started, it was rather a bit confusing, i seriously wondered what i was reading but after the whole numbered part, i kinda liked ...

LOL...wow, firstly, i've gotta say i liked it in a small smiley way. when i started, i was rather frowning but after i finished, i couldn't help but smile. It ...

Wow, true true true. I really loved it, especially, "The happiest people don't truly know what's going on around them.". That got me stumped and to tell you the truth, ...

To tell the truth, this a rather lovely poem. It has all the qualities of a great poem too. But, to be honest, it took me quite a while to ...