Broken Heart's Lament

Ladcat sometimes I hate you. You introduced me to YWS yet never told me you wrote things like this. As your sister I would love to know things like this. I thought it was beautiful and I will never say this to your face.

Thanks so much guys! I didn't expect such great feedback for a poem that I hardly even thought about! I'll be sure to write more.

like everyone said before me, your poem is very and i mean VERY relatable.
Anyway, it was quite well written and the grammar was good. Also you did well in making the whole work rotate around the main topic. So, loved it and hope you continue writing relatable poems . GOODJOB

Many people will be able to relate to what you have written, I personally think you did a great job and it is a poem with so much but tells it quite strightforward as well. I enjoy your style.

This is so good. The way you worded it, making it just vague enough that anybody can relate to what you said. It really makes you think. Well written.

I think this is totally relatable. It was for the most part very well written and inspiring. Other than that grammatical error that rwalgren pointed out it was really good. Great job!

I'm not very good at poetry but I think this is pretty good. It's very relatable the entire first half is my friend and the best poems are the ones that relate to people's everyday lives or inspire them. one critic: "Because has a friend:" I don't know if you meant to do that because it doesn't really make sense shouldn't "it" go in there