piepiemann22

I'm not really going to coment until you finish, but can't you come up with origanal names. You could of at least warned me before using my name. So far ...

I like the basic idea, but it needs some work. 1-Like Claudette said it doesn't flow to well. Read over it a couple of time and listen to it or ...

lots already been said so if i repeat anything i don't mean to. 1-Way to descriptive. When you do this you start telling in stead of showing. It leaves little ...

Okay, over all it is good, i like it. But What must it be like to do whatever you want? Without the constant murmur of people telling you, you can't? ...

This poem was good. unfortuently we can't alway's be nicy nice. First, stanzas may be usefull here. You don't have to break it up, but it's an idea. Here's my ...

Let me use my heart to see, 　　　　 To realize what friends can be, 　　And make no judgments from afar, But love my friends the way they are This line ...

You say this is about Tattoos, but i don't see how it fits. I mean, since you stated it, it seems to fit well. I just couldn't get that fact ...

The writing and flow is good. But I don't like the poem all that much. I don't see how someone could write a poem like that. Then again everyone is ...

Okay, lets see. it is good, but I'm not sure it's best as poetry. It may be better as a short srory if you fiddle with it a bit. I'm ...

I like it. From what i understand it sounds like some one broke up with another because they lied about everything and now they want him/her back. NICE. Is you ...

I like it. It seems to talk about something important if not for you, others. But ther are a few parts i didn't understand. "It screams in pan to me," ...

I believe it's good, but it lacks color in my oppinion. There's emotion, but where's it coming from. When I think of emotional poetry I think the write should feel ...

Me again. I'm going over your work and it's quiute good. I've learned a few tips, thanks. Your second verse is better. I belive it speaks more on what you ...

Telling us things isn't bad, but you did go a little over board. I realy like the fact you put alot into the world. The Panthwar cat people was a ...